Thursday, June 21, 2012

Making Story Changes

I'm making some serious changes to a short story that I've had puttering around for a few years.  I think it's better now.  Here's a quote from one of the new scenes I wrote.  (It probably needs editing.)

"I don't know what Gabrielle is doing.  She grabs my hand instead of a towel to clean my mess.  She turns it over.  It is red.  There is blood everywhere and I didn't notice.  It mixes with the wine, though the blood probably has enough wine in it already.  I didn't think I was that drunk.  Now that I see the gash, I start to feel the pain.  My hand burns and aches."

Image by Francesco Pappalardo via Wikimedia Commons.

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